What do you think I should call my story? I need a good title.?
Here it is:
Susenna Lyle Rodriguez. She is my mother. She stood at the door and smiles, her big, warm, motherly smile. She had one hand on her basketball sized stomach and the other placed lovingly around my step-father, Kevin Patrick White. My little sister, Mia was standing by my side. Both of her arms wrapped around me. My twin step-brothers, Jesse and Ashton, stood in front of my mom’s legs.
I realize, now, that I’m here, everything that I will be missing. My school Saint June’s christen Academy, though I was ever so happy to leave that school and though god damned itchy uniforms. I would miss my two best friends, Liana and Luna. I’d miss my cat Mew Mu and my room, its baby blue walls and scruffy white carpet. I’d miss my mom, most of all, her silly self. I miss it all.
“Come on Mia. Get your bags we are going on a road trip.” I said, reluctantly. She squealed with delight. My mom smiles her warm motherly smile again.
“I miss you already baby girl.” Mom said into my hair as I wrapped my arms around her. My fingertips didn’t touch, she was too big around. The baby kicked, she moaned, I pulled away. “It’s okay. She misses you too.”
“Bye mom.” I kissed her, waved by to the boys and to Kevin, and walked out the door holding my phone, car keys, and three bags.
“I love you little one.” I heard mom say to Mia. I then heard Mia slam the door and her little pitter-patter of her tennis shoes.
“Wait up!” Mia called. I started my car then pressed the trunk open button. I got out and picked up Mia and my bags off the sidewalk and chucked them is the trunk and slammed it. I got in.
“Mia, you going to miss this place?” I asked once I got in and buckled.
“Mom, mostly. I kind of never liked Kevin. He’s creepy. I’m glad we are moving in with Nana and Papa.”
“How old are you now?”
“Thirteen. You know that.”
“Just joking.”
“Oh.”
“You know we are staying until I graduate, right?”
“Yeah. Two years. What are you trying to get at?”
“When you turn fifteen do you think you’ll let Nana throw you a Quinceañera?”
“Oh course, it’s rockin’.”
“Don’t talk like that.”
"Okay."
Please try not to be mean or crule about it, but try to be real about it. If it’s bad tell me, but don’t go ‘You suck, man!’
Thank you.
Jasmine is ‘I’. Her little sister Mia and her are going to live with her Nana "grandma" and Papa "Grandpa" because Mia feels overwhelmed because of the new baby and the little brothers. Mia wants to go live with her Nana, Papa, and cousin Su so she can get away from it all. Mia wants to come because she’ll miss her sister. later on in the story Jasmine meets Harvey Wilkenston, her Papa’s best friend. She then meets his two sons, Hunter and Simon and his three daughters, Lilly, Rose, and Silver Rivers. Jasmine takes up dating Hunter but he soon learns that she isn’t the only one keeping secrets. Jasmine meets Alexander Anderson. A local vampire with his family of 8 and himself, making 9. Alexander doesn’t like Jasmine in the way she likes him. Alexander turns down Jasmine’s thousands of requests. Though, Jasmine, being able to see the future, knows he will soon love her the way she does him. And then they meet the Leaders. The Leaders are the supreme royalty of the vampire realm.
I think it’s okay, but you could be a little more detail and watch out for adjectives. Also in the beginning when she says "I’m going to miss…" it sounds like Bella in Twilight, so be careful on that. As for the title weel we have very little info on what the story major plot will be about. Remeber the title is the last thing you should worry about. But here are some that I could think of based on what I read:
Going Away
Gone and Forgotten
A new Beginning or A new start
A walk that changes life
Together away
The sisters’ new start
sorry if I wasn’t much help
good luck and keep writing 
